During an office hours visit on Thursday, September 22nd, 2017, Dr. Wharton and I discussed the importance of understanding and learning how to use the technological tools presented to us in class. These tools increase our level of preparedness for future careers, as well as for the rest of college.
During the visit, I also learned how to change the text code in my Primary Source Descriptions document in order to prevent my paragraphs from assuming the format of my subject headers.
I was also informed of the fact that paragraph indentations were not required nor necessarily useful for the Primary Source Description. A simple return key stroke would provide ample paragraph structure to the description.
Important feedback about the current draft of my Primary Source Description prompted me to be more thoughtful of how I chose to block out my description.
Paragraphing, Dr. Wharton described, organizes different clusters of evidence. She recommended that I designate broad details of the panel into one paragraph, and create separate paragraphs for the instances I include a specific description of a particular object or material.
(For instance, the following paragraph demonstrates my attempt to sort specific details into their own paragraph:
“On the quilt, most of the stars are evenly spaced. Like party confetti, these stars are golden, with five points that could prick one’s finger. Their surface is flat and slightly cool to the touch though their points are sharp.”)
Her feedback improved the organization of my essay greatly.
My peer review session also improved my description’s organization. My peer reviewer encouraged me to provide an overview of how I would organize my description at the beginning of my text, which I feel helps to give clarity to the following description.
My partner also suggested that I include textural details early in my observation of an image on the quilt so that readers are more prepared to imagine that part of the panel in detail. For instance, I needed to say earlier whether or not an image was stitched onto the quilt, painted on, or else.
During my office hours visit, I also learned that I did not have to write the Primary Source Description according to MLA format.